Why does everything have to be so damn difficult?
Why does everything always fall apart?
Why is the world such a fucking mess?
Why do we leave it the way it is?
Why can't love be simple?
Why can't pain be brief?
Why do we hurt the ones we love when we try to make things right?
Why are most people small minded, thinking only of themselves?
Why are the rest so kind, they always get hurt in the crossfire?
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I thought it was a very nice poem, it expressed the pain you are going through.
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I think the last three lines didn't really fit into the rest of the poem.
Good work though!!
I think this was short but it worked for you. I think the end should have been a bit more epic though. It was a bit of a dissapointment. The repition normally would have annoyed me but just like the length it worked for you
Nice Job.
~Jasmine Bells~
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